Exercise 9:  

Instructions 
Below you will find attempts at drafting two short summaries, each written in a highly informal and colloquial (spoken) style. Clearly first draft, both passages reflect the kind of stumbling awkwardness and wordiness that often characterizes such efforts. Effective academic writing must be much more precise and articulate, each summary in its final form reflecting not only the main ideas and their supporting ideas but the original texts' essential relationships and values within sets of ideas.  

On scratch paper, revise these summaries repeatedly until only the essential concepts--the main idea and supporting primary details--remain.  E-mail  me the final copy.  Each summary should be composed as a single, (grammatically) complex sentence, reflecting not only the key concepts in the total rough draft but also with the appropriate emphasis. 

Summary 1: 
 

In Robert Berry's book, Reading for the Main Idea, he talks about how when most people read, they don't really read so that they can understand. They just read for pleasure. You have to read for the main idea in each paragraph. 

Janice Amlin wrote about an article entitled, "The Wimp Factor: Surviving Under the Glass Ceiling." She writes about women who can't get to the top in their jobs. The men who are their bosses really discriminate against women. That's why they can't get better paying jobs. It's because of the men and the way they feel about women. 

Naming and Saving Your Files 
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Submitting Your Exercises 
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Should I revise only the sentences you have marked or the whole essay? 

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